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Monday, September 26, 2011

Writing Effectively 2

Here’s the example letter I wrote last week, using my outline:

DA Pat Lykos,
This letter is about Carlos Coy, TDCJ #01110642
I want him to be given a new trial.
There is evidence that his first trial was unfair, and it’s your job to give us justice.

Incandesio
www.spmaftermath.blogspot.com

Even if they only read the first line, Coy’s name jumps out at them. It’s stuck in their brain, and next time they hear or read something about him, they will think of my letter. They will not count how many letters about him they get, but they will know whether they’ve gotten several or just a few. I say ‘they’ because odds are that Lykos herself is not reading them. Some young intern in her office is probably stuck with that job, and at the end of the day he or she turns in a list of what the letters were about. Carlos Coy’s name needs to appear frequently on that list.

I clearly say that I want him to have a new trial. They’re not going to let him out without either a new trial or some kind of new evidence , and I think a new trial is more likely. That shows that I grasp the legal system well enough to know that they won’t just ‘free SPM’, and that I’m asking for something that’s completely reasonable.

I try to offer a reason for her to investigate. In this case, I state my belief that his trial was unfair. As a voter, that’s reason enough for me to complain. As an elected official, it should (in theory) be enough to prompt Pat Lykos to look into the trial.

Now that you’ve got a basic letter like this, you might want to add stuff; Decide which point it supports, and put it underneath that line. Under the ‘what I want’ line, consider writing about how Coy has affected your life; what has he done that makes you care enough to act?
Under ‘why I want it’, back up your suspicions with fact. I usually mention things I have uncovered like the possibility of Brady violations, which means that the prosecutors have illegally hidden evidence; Batson violations, which is when prosecutors dismiss jurors because of their race; the possibility of an inappropriate relationship between Coy’s Defense lawyer and the prosecutors.

I swear on the blog because I swear when I talk, but I don’t swear in my letters. I don’t know how Lykos feels about people saying ‘fuck’, and I don’t want her to discount what I’m saying because of my language.

You can start your letter with ‘dear’ or not. You can call her ‘The Honorable’ or not. There is no magical formula, no exact balance of words you have to achieve before your letter becomes ‘good’. Write sincerely and with confidence that your voice is worth hearing.

14 comments:

Anonymous said...

quit being a fag for him. he likes little girls

Anonymous said...

^shut the fuck up! why are you even reading this blog if your gonna hate? You are a piece of shit you hater.

Anonymous said...

Hey incandesio,

Would I be able to send SPM a letter in the pen? If so let me know how!

Incandesio said...

4:25, you're on my blog reading about a guy you act like you hate; sounds like you're the one with a little man-crush.
4:26, don't worry about it. He's here, he's reading, maybe he'll learn something.
4:30, sending SPM a letter is easy! Here's his address:
Carlos Coy #01110642
James V. Allred Unit
2101 FM 369 N.
Iowa Park, TX 76367

Anonymous said...

your doin a good job keep it up hope his out soon!

Incandesio said...

Thanks for reading!

Anonymous said...

Ima write my boy a letter

Troublesome said...

So is that really where he is? I wanna write him a letter..

Incandesio said...

Yes, that's his current address.

Anonymous said...

All i have to say is that Spm is a good rapper and i like his music but at the same time he is a child molester, if it were your kid would you be on here saying release spm. no i dont think so and if so its just saying you dont mind if ur kid gets molested as long as its by an famous rapper like come on smartin up he didnt even get close to what i think is a fair sentence

Incandesio said...

So your contention is that, by arguing the need for someone to get a fair trial, I support child molestation, especially that of my own child, as long as it's performed by a famous rapper.

Also that I should 'like come on smartin up.'

Is that right?

Anonymous said...

You might want to inform and educate yourself on the subject before making a stupid comment. Have u read the court transcripts?? Just by reading that u should know that Sp didn't get a fair trial. Free SPM!

Joe Cruz said...

Los fights hate with love and that's a powerful tool and exactly what a bigger man does! He has inspired so many for years and still does, regardless of the negative remarks you make, that's why they say Real recognize Real! He was not given a fair trial and it was decided before it began!

Joe Cruz said...

Los fights hate with love and that's a powerful tool and exactly what a bigger man does! He has inspired so many for years and still does, regardless of the negative remarks you make, that's why they say Real recognize Real! He was not given a fair trial and it was decided before it began!